Saturday, April 1, 2017

The Noob 24


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  1. I liked the fight scene up until the end . . . it didn't fit. Alicia is in command of the fight until she calms down and then as she goes to finish the beast off she takes a mortal blow? This seems off.

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    Zapper

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    1. This is a fair point. Fight scenes aren't really my strong point. I guess I was going for the sudden shock at the end of the scene... but I think you're right. It probably would have been better to have Alicia injured early in the scene and have her fight through her injury. There's a different, maybe a better, kind of tension in that... and it seems very barbarianish to use adrenaline to keep yourself standing when an injury should have brought you down. Good critique. :)

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